ALL - Feedback Rough Cut 1

Audience: We showed this version of the rough cut to members of our A2 media class (all aged 17/18years old). This is an ideal audience to show the rough cut to because it fits within our primary target audience for the music video of 15-24year olds. Also for this early rough cut we showed it to adults at home who fit within the secondary audience category of original Robbie Williams followers.


Rough cut 1 feedback

• Start- mantel piece, photo album (flicking through, touching a photograph) don't reveal that person, condolence card, wedding invite
• Shakiness - slow down - baking scene
• Nathan grab Katies bum- needs to be quicker
• Pink spoon and bowl tongue
• Match cuts to link
• Josh's hands to wavy in driving bit
• driving- cross cut between the 3 scenes (make new doc to show before and after - youtube annotation tool- do not have to be long)
• Painting- space needs to be sped up
• Boy smiling painting at robbies high note
• child had blonde hair - hair changes as people are growing up so it doesn't necessarily have to been the same because in normal life it changes colour all the time
• get audience feedback from people who don't know the idea to see if it makes sense
• Don't keep 3 scenes, mix it up, less structure
• cut youngest kids to high notes? find specific parts of the track to match with it
• Trade shots into background of main scene, low opacity 
• More shots of hug at the train> 360 degree angle? layering
• Oldest dinner, darker/sadder bit of the song
• Candle flames/fire flames
• film some frost on the ground - match with duvet
• Better ending
• dont always show the face
• More performance of robbie singing
• pace can be slow in places
• Film performance ASAP
• Transitions need to be a lot smoother
• Need performance footage
• Fade into one another to signify them growing up

Rough cut generation 2 feedback

• New MP3 to stop clicking
• Wobble with camera on cake making shot
• 'Very corny in a good way" - Ben Hudson
• Cut down shots
• More variation further on 
• Walkie talkie bit very good - boy in bed/girl in bed as well
• Edit out shaky footage - freeze frame, slow motion
• Blackberry 
• Painting too young for 14 years old - 12 years old instead
• Birthday cards for each generation
• PS2 car game and controller
• Sync robot scene too track